Sunday, October 23, 2011

The "Three Tacise" Challenge

I was disappointed that I couldn't do the first two challenges of the "I'm a Platform-Building Campaigner" but for the Third Challenge, I thought I'll put everything I got. Well nearly everything. ;-)
So here was the Challenge:
Write a blog post in 300 words or less , excluding the title. The post can be in any format, whether flash fiction , non-fiction, humorous blog musings, poem, etc. The blog post should show:

  • That it’s morning
  • That a man or a woman (or both) is at the beach
  • That the MC (main character) is bored
  • That something stinks behind where he/she is sitting
  • That something surprising happens.
Just for fun, see if you can involve all five senses AND include these random words: "synbatec ," "wastopaneer ," and "tacise ."  (NB. these words are completely made up and are not intended to have any meaning other than the one you give them).
Give me strenght because the first thing I wanted to do after I read the challenge was to write:

It was morning. A man or, was it a woman, was at the beach. He was bored. Something stunk behind where he was sitting. Then something surprising happened.
Obviously the exercise of "show, don't tell" was going nowhere if i did that, so I had to work a little harder to come up with this...
The Three Tacise Challenge
The first rays of light shone lightly above the dark grey sea. 
She walked steadily or more like marched towards him, her walk impeded by the deep sand. 
A breeze rose and with it, a horrible stench. It was foul and rancid like a bad combination of mold and body putrefaction. Then between the palm trees, something moved.
He grimaced and half turned.
To his right, three huge Tacise were galloping towards them. The disproportionate creatures roared and ran faster as they saw their prey.
He sneezed and his snot shot out like a bullet on the blond sand. 
She looked at him, disgusted but raised her sword at the ready.
He covered the snot with his boot and raised his hand in apology.
"Sorry, don't mind me although maybe I'm having an allergy to these Wastopaneer."
And then he burped. 
"Synbatec!" she screamed infuriated. "Synbatec for christ's sake!"
She stomped her boots on the floor and their background vanished to a cold metallic room. Two monitors lit up and buttons appeared on the far walls. 
"What's the point of these simulations if you don't take them seriously!" she snapped.
"Sorry I got confused...actually the setting of the beach confused me..."
"What about the three Tacise?"
"Oh those," he shrugged and burped again. "No, I was ready for them. But first, I think I need a nap. To digest. What do you think?"
"Go to hell!" she said marching out of the room.

I try to get as far as I could from the idea of two lovers on the making the scene as un-romantic as possible...;-)
Entry # 110


  1. That was a great turn at the end. I like that. Mine is #56

  2. Yes, I loved it! Very unexpected but I want to know more of the story!! Great job! New follower by the way :)

    I'm entry #5

  3. I liked how it turned out to be a simulation. Fun!

    Mine is #115.

  4. I liked this a lot! A very fun entry (and I kind of liked your first draft as well!)
    Mine is #25

  5. Very imaginative! I love the way that the meaning of the 3 nonsense words is made clear by the context in which you use them. Top marks.

  6. Excellent twist.Love the story & the setting. Use of the three unusual words is very well done.

  7. Oh thank you guys a lot! It's much appreciated.

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  9. That was too much fun. I like how you brought up the nasty smell early on. Great flow and voice throughout. Thanks for posting! :)

  10. Love the use of the words and the smell.

  11. I liked that you tried to make it as unromantic as possible.

  12. Oh fab! Love the fact it was a simulation - very unexpected and it works really well. And yes, it is unromantic - but intriguing - what world do they live in? It makes me want to know more. :)

  13. I'm a judge in the third campaigners challenge and you have moved into the second phase of judging! Big congrats!!!

  14. Hey, you totally stood the challenge on its head. Very entertaining. Not sorry I decided to meme you, LOL.